#tenqueries 5: Adult Thriller. This story includes a sinister plot, a deadly conspiracy, exploitation, a discovery, and masterminds—all words that feel a little boilerplate, but don't tell me enough about what actually happens. Pass.
#tenqueries 3: Adult Historical. This might also be YA, it’s hard to tell from the query, but while it sounds rather intriguing, the writing felt stilted, with too many details told in a way that wasn't connected to character or action. Pass.
#tenqueries 2: YA Contemporary. The writing in this one just didn’t hook me. It was a little overwritten with literary flourishes -- a lot of metaphors especially -- that slowed the pacing a touch too much. I like a lyrical voice but not at the expense of pacing. Pass.
#tenqueries 10: Adult Memoir. This query spends far too much time focused on why this memoir is better than all other memoirs out there. I don’t need to be told this—let me make that judgment on my own, after reading your work for myself. Pass.
#tenqueries 9: YA Paranormal. I’d have loved to see this query be longer. Concise is good, but too concise and you lose the specificity of your pitch. Pass. That said, I will say I'm open to YA paranormal, especially as we've never seen it before.
#tenqueries 8: YA Sci-fi. In reading the included pages, I found myself uninvested in the third person, present tense voice in the story, I think because it lacked an intimacy and immediacy as used here -- it wasn't close enough to the protagonist. Pass.
#tenqueries 7: YA Social Thriller. This story hints at a bit of drama, a bit of mystery, and a bit of danger within its pages. I also found the voice to be smart and accessible, with quick pacing. I’m interested to see what secrets are here. Request.
#tenqueries 6: YA Contemporary. I’m not convinced that this is a YA novel. It sounds far more adult in content, scope, and voice. I do like a good coming-of-age story told with the distance & perspective of adulthood, but the writing here isn't quite doing it for me. Pass.
#tenqueries 5: Adult Fiction. The writing in the first pages of this query feels forced, as though the author is trying to convince me of something, rather than letting the words unfold in a way that will naturally intrigue me to these characters and the plot. Pass.
#tenqueries 4: YA Sci-fi. What’s confusing about this query is the lack of clarity about how much the main character knows about her world. Did she know about the sci-fi aspects of the world before being introduced to them, or is a whole new world opened up for her? Pass.