Kelly Peterson

#tenqueries 11. Quite a bit of telling in the pages! Not much showing, so no connection with the story or character. :(

#tenqueries 10. A little too proper in language, not utilizing contractions, etc.. Because of this, it doesn’t quite flow like I would hope it would. Another unfortunate pass. :(

#tenqueries 9. Manuscript under 30k words for an adult genre. Far too low to sell! Sorry, but it has to be a pass.

#tenqueries 8. Picture book, which I don’t represent at this time. Sorry! Pass.

#tenqueries 6. I’m very confused how this manuscript is three different genres that are exact opposites of each other? What confuses me more is that the query is only a sentence long and tells me nothing about the manuscript? Sorry, but this is a pass.

#tenqueries 4. Short, chopped sentences with a lack of fluency due to telling rather than showing in the opening. Word count is also low due to this, as it usually takes more words to show. :( Pass.

#tenqueries 3. Starting with a lot of backstory and flashbacks, which isn’t engaging me with the character and pulling me into the story. Unfortunate pass.

#tenqueries 2. Great premise, unfortunately the writing/voice was just sounding more adult than YA to me. Unfortunate pass, because that was a super cool concept. :(

Good and interesting concept, but just. Not. Quite. There. The voice just isn't as prominent as I'd like it to be. #tenqueries #FindingMyOne

I repeat: a manuscript with a MC that starts as 18 or older does not belong in the YA age range... #tenqueries #FindingMyOne

Interesting concept, but just not quite grabbing me like I'd wish it to... #tenqueries #FindingMyOne