Kelly 📚
@LitAgentKelly
Agent, PR & Communications at @CorvisieroLit . Khaleesi. Philadelphian. Pisces. She/her. Multitasks #LikeABoss . Gandalf of #TheFellowship . Tweets are my own.✌🏻
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#tenqueries 11. Quite a bit of telling in the pages! Not much showing, so no connection with the story or character. :(
#tenqueries 10. A little too proper in language, not utilizing contractions, etc.. Because of this, it doesn’t quite flow like I would hope it would. Another unfortunate pass. :(
#tenqueries 9. Manuscript under 30k words for an adult genre. Far too low to sell! Sorry, but it has to be a pass.
#tenqueries 8. Picture book, which I don’t represent at this time. Sorry! Pass.
#tenqueries 7. The opening of this one has so much world building that it’s slightly overwhelming and seems unnecessary. I’m unfortunately not being drawn into your character’s story because there’s nothing about your character here to connect to. Just what’s around them.
#tenqueries 6. I’m very confused how this manuscript is three different genres that are exact opposites of each other? What confuses me more is that the query is only a sentence long and tells me nothing about the manuscript? Sorry, but this is a pass.
#tenqueries 5. Breaking the 4th wall in order to set up a scene in the beginning just doesn’t work for me. I’d rather you jump me right in to the character’s perspective rather than trying to set a scene by having your character talk directly to me. Sorry!
#tenqueries 4. Short, chopped sentences with a lack of fluency due to telling rather than showing in the opening. Word count is also low due to this, as it usually takes more words to show. :( Pass.
#tenqueries 3. Starting with a lot of backstory and flashbacks, which isn’t engaging me with the character and pulling me into the story. Unfortunate pass.
#tenqueries 2. Great premise, unfortunately the writing/voice was just sounding more adult than YA to me. Unfortunate pass, because that was a super cool concept. :(
#tenqueries 1. Good opening with character and intrigue, but not much world building and a bit too much telling in order to try to fit a large amount of details in there. Be careful of this in opening scenes as it distances your reader with too much info!
Kelly 📚 @LitAgentKelly · 30 Mar 2016
Good and interesting concept, but just. Not. Quite. There. The voice just isn't as prominent as I'd like it to be. #tenqueries #FindingMyOne
Kelly 📚 @LitAgentKelly · 30 Mar 2016
I repeat: a manuscript with a MC that starts as 18 or older does not belong in the YA age range... #tenqueries #FindingMyOne
Kelly 📚 @LitAgentKelly · 29 Mar 2016
Interesting concept, but just not quite grabbing me like I'd wish it to... #tenqueries #FindingMyOne
Kelly 📚 @LitAgentKelly · 29 Mar 2016
*sigh* The amount of queries I've opened claiming to be YA, but the main character is in college or older... #tenqueries #FindingMyOne
Kelly 📚 @LitAgentKelly · 28 Mar 2016
Writing in first person is DIFFICULT. Make sure you vary your sentence structure, even more if not practiced! #tenqueries #FindingMyOne
Kelly 📚 @LitAgentKelly · 28 Mar 2016
Oy, so close, but just not quite there. A little too much description and not enough polish in the writing. #tenqueries #FindingMyOne
Kelly 📚 @LitAgentKelly · 28 Mar 2016
When querying, your manuscript should be polished to gold in your standards, without multiple spelling mistakes. #tenqueries #FindingMyOne
Kelly 📚 @LitAgentKelly · 28 Mar 2016
Be careful with your opening! Open with a bang, draw your readers in, then let the description trickle through. #tenqueries #FindingMyOne
Kelly 📚 @LitAgentKelly · 28 Mar 2016
Another one that just isn't the right fit. #tenqueries #FindingMyOne