#tenqueries 7. The opening of this one has so much world building that it’s slightly overwhelming and seems unnecessary. I’m unfortunately not being drawn into your character’s story because there’s nothing about your character here to connect to. Just what’s around them.
#tenqueries 6. I’m very confused how this manuscript is three different genres that are exact opposites of each other? What confuses me more is that the query is only a sentence long and tells me nothing about the manuscript? Sorry, but this is a pass.
#tenqueries 5. Breaking the 4th wall in order to set up a scene in the beginning just doesn’t work for me. I’d rather you jump me right in to the character’s perspective rather than trying to set a scene by having your character talk directly to me. Sorry!
#tenqueries 1. Good opening with character and intrigue, but not much world building and a bit too much telling in order to try to fit a large amount of details in there. Be careful of this in opening scenes as it distances your reader with too much info!