Try to stay away from over exaggerations and use adverbs ending in -ly sparingly. It doesn't help to get your point across, and let's be honest, which is stronger:
"She's extremely angry and goes to hunt them down."
"She hunts them down, anger raging inside her."
Make sure you include the basics at a minimum:
WHO is your character?
WHAT do they want (goal)?
WHEN does it all blow up in their faces (inciting incident)?
WHERE does this lead them?
HOW does this change their goal/character?
WHY is this new goal so important (stakes)?
This is also why sending your query to multiple beta readers and CPs is so important. I consistently ask for multiple reads of pitches because I know I utilize these weaker words and that my friends can help me pick them out. Make friends. Help friends. Ask for help. #querytip
I struggle all the time qith using powerful words in queries and submissions. Some of my weakest are usually verbs like "thinks," "comes to find," "extremely," etc.. It's HARD, but these all make your character quite passive and aren't as strong as they could be! #querytip
Use your manuscript's strengths to your advantage. Have a nice genre-bending manuscript that's creepy/atmospheric, but also has family ties? Make one query accentuating the creepy atmosphere and another accentuating the family ties and be smart about who you send to. #querytip
Make sure you do your research, and if we don't specifically mention a genre or age range, it's probably because we don't represent it. I don't represent non-fiction but have received MANY queries in non-fiction that I've had to unfortunately turn down. Please research. #querytip
Skelly-ton is CLOSED to Queries 🎃💀 @LitAgentKellySince I'm seeing a ridiculous amount of queries that aren't following directions or not utilizing their skills in a way that catches attention, I wanted to do a quick #querytip thread. Keep in mind, I AM NOT reading queries at this second, so this is not a subtweet to anyone.
One of the most simple forms of success with querying is just following directions. Use the proper query layout; address the agent or editor personally; state your genre, age range, title, and word count first or last in your query; include the asked for content! #querytip
I’m so frustrated, so random #querytip, DO NOT email 100-some agents and tell them to start bidding money for your query, and that for each bid, you will release one word of your manuscript. It cracks me up that you all think we’ve got thousands of dollars lying around to—
Metra Kootsikas @Nice2MeechaHey @LitAgentKelly! Do you like spoilers in your requested synopses or not? I have two versions: 🙈 or 🐵! #amquerying
Synopses always give away the ending and spoilers! A query shouldn’t. :) Also, #querytip
Random #querytip: Voice doesn’t always mean the dialogue or the thoughts/italics that come from your main character. Most of the time, it’s actually your sentence structures and your word choices. So, how can you best convey your style, and your character, through words?
Kortney Price @kortney_priceI'm getting a LOT of queries with super low word counts for their category/genre. When you're editing make sure to keep this in mind! Not sure? A great resource is litrejections.com/word-count/ #querytip #subtip
That’s so funny, because I’m getting all the queries with super high word counts. 😂🤷🏼♀️ Guys, even in adult high fantasies, I really don’t want to be reading a book longer than 130k words. I just don’t have that kind of time and I bet you can probably tighten it. #querytip
#querytip If an agent rejects you because of your word count, please don’t resubmit your query with the exact same pages and word count, only changing your query to now list all of the ridiculous reasons the agent is supposedly wrong and you are supposedly right. #Nope
#querytip Another great conversation and clarification that's come about tonight: Third Person Omniscient vs. Third Person Limited! It's important to know the difference and which one you're writing. :) Make sure you do your research with other books, too! thebalancecareers.com/third-person-p…
#querytip I'm seeing so many people who don't have a strong, enthralling voice for three reasons:
1. You're not varying your sentence structure.
2. You're not telling the story from your MC, but rather a narrator.
3. You're not utilizing all of your MC's senses to tell the story.
#Querytip I've seen many authors who have no idea how to write a query recently. My box is filled with writers who only put a few sentences down or put their synopsis in the query section instead. If you're unsure how, @JaneFriedman is an excellent source! janefriedman.com/query-letters/
4. The accidental pregnancy/using a baby as the only tension in romance is not my jam.
5. Psychological thrillers are basically with emotional turmoil. Anything too emotionally/psychologically dark and I don't like it.
6. I don't represent PBs or chapter books. #querytip
10 things I wish writers knew about me:
1. I don't like Christmas stories, but I love Christmas as a holiday.
2. I have a horse but I don't usually like horse stories.
3. I'm not an animal main character person, even in MG. I can never connect, even though I love them.
Found a slew of queries today making 1 of these 2mistakes:
1. Not including an actual query. Please research queries and what's meant to be in them before querying.
2. Querying self published books because you want a larger audience and now want to traditionally pub.
#querytip A lot of people try to break the fourth wall in their manuscripts, but the problem with that is that you, as a writer, are physically making your reader step back and realize they're not in your story. Part of the magic of books that you love is because you feel like