Kelly Peterson

10. The voice on this one just sounds young because the MC doesn't seem to have much, if any, agency within their life, and are rather just being pushed and pulled from one quick action and plot device to the next. Unfortunately, this means no real connection. Reject 😞#10subs

9. Really intrigued by the premise of this one, but I'm not sure the writing will hold up. I LOVE THE WORLD, though! This is a LONG submission, so I'm putting this into the "maybe" pile to come back to a bit later. =) Hopefully a full request in the making! 🤞 #10subs

8. I'm about 20 pages in and not sure who the MC is. There's too many POV's, and there's no thread to really connect them throughout the story. I'm not sure where I am in time or place, and need a bit more world building and less characters to ground myself. Reject. 😞 #10subs

7. This one was actually really cool. I think it starts in the wrong place, but the rest of the chapters were much better. A little bit too dark for me (on the horror side), even though I really liked it! I actually sent this to my co-worker, who is a better fit! 👍 #10subs

6. A little bit too much backstory and telling in the first chapters, distancing me from the main character. I'd love to see more voice! Not much else to say though. I'm just not quite jiving with this one the way I had hoped, even though the writing is decent. Reject 😞 #10subs

5. I really like this one. Completely wasn't expecting this! The tension is high, the writing is pretty solid (though could use a bit of tweaking for less description/backstory), but pulls me in right away and I'm fully connected to the MC! I want MORE! Partial Request 🤗 #10subs

4. Really not connecting with the MC and their actions here. When meeting men in the first few scenes, I want to be able to connect with how she feels. I'm not able to do that because of a lack of emotion/thought and the MC being very opposite of my personality. Reject 😞#10subs

3. Cool concept, but shorter, discordant sentences which are lacking in fluency of both plot and beat. The plot is changing consistently throughout the first few pages, and because I don't have a connection to the reader or foreshadowing, I don't care much. Reject 😞 #10subs

2. Diving into the pages and finding a lot of unintentionally addressing the reader. =( What's actually happening is that the main character's emotions and thoughts are so on display that it appears she/he is talking to me, instead of showing me how they feel. Reject. 😞 #10subs

1. Great concept and was really looking forward to reading this, but the writing feels a bit bland. The sentence structures need a more versatility, the voice sounds a bit older than it should, and I'm wondering if this beginning is necessary to the plot? Rejection. 😞#10subs