Kaitlyn Johnson

Q1 - MG Fantasy

Query jumps right into the conflict and world details that make it unique. Was immediately intrigued.

Gives just enough to keep me guessing; stakes are a bit unclear but still draw me in. It's different and love the inspiration behind it! #RevPit #10queries

#RevPit #10queries P8: Repetitive sentence start (careful starting all w/ I, She, He, etc). Should vary structure & decrease narrative voice

#RevPit That's all for #10queries right now! I'll be back (probably tomorrow) for another round.

#RevPit #10queries P10: Story doesn't start w/ MC. Query didn't mention any supporting character POVs. Makes me feel off balance as reader

#RevPit #10queries Q10: Adult Women's Fic. MC motives not my taste. Rather than growth, query shows consequences w/o end resolution

#RevPit #10queries P9: Odd contrast in 1st page. Family details apparent that I didn't see coming from query. Unsure but MC seems unlikable

#RevPit #10queries Q9: New Adult Romance. Every male character painted as sexually/socially dominant jerk. Can't tell how benefits plot

#RevPit #10queries Q8: Adult Women's Fic. 2 plots seem at odds (weird mix for this book). Wonder if pgs will be unclear of find a blend

#RevPit #10queries P7: Good voice, but unsure MCs need to be painted so sexual right off the bat. Again, shame about word count =[

#RevPit #10queries Q7: Adult Romance. LOVE the power complex here. But word count is WAY too low. This is novella length =[

#RevPit #10queries P6: Beginning needs clearer details. Where are we & why? Leaves too much to guess. Voice doesn't quite click w/ me

#RevPit #10queries Q6: Adult Contemp. Confused on real plot of story. Seems multiple fighting for top spot. Beginning needs more grounding

#RevPit #10queries P5: Another fixable 1st line. Natural writing, good voice. Love taste of both POVs. NEED TO SEE MORE!

#RevPit #10queries Q5: Adult Romance. Great hook & stakes. Great job finding conflict in romance. Love plan for series details. <3

#RevPit #10queries P4: Awkward 1st line. Starts w/ POV not promised in query. Suggest new beginning w/ MC to understand situation better