Q2: Science Fiction: This is a bit low on word count and has aliens in it, which isn't my jam. Pass #tenqueries 3/

Q1: YA Fantasy: This pitch is 5 sentences long and doesn't do enough to distinguish itself from the many YA Fantasy pitches I see in my inbox. Pass. #tenqueries 2/

Q10: Women's Fiction: This is one of those dual-timeline stories that people love, but I do not. Alas. Pass. #tenqueries 11/

Q9: YA Fantasy: One of the POV's in this is an inanimate object and I just don't think that is going to work for me. Pass. #tenqueries 10/

Q8: Romantic Suspense: This pitch didn't include sample pages so who knows. There are elements I liked, some I was skeptical of, so the sample pages would have been critical to review. Pass. #tenqueries 9/

Q7: Romance: This is set in the 90s and I just am not the right fit for stories set in near-contemporary settings. I'm not ready for my high school and college years to be historical settings, LOL. Pass. #tenqueries 8/

Q6: YA Fantasy: I have seen versions of this same siren story over and over again. It's okay to reimagine stories and ideas, but you have to take it a step further to make it really stand out and that's what's missing. Pass. #tenqueries 7/

Q5: YA Fantasy: I'm not sure this elven mythology is quite my jam. It doesn't feel new enough. Pass. #tenqueries 6/

Q4: YA Contemporary: This doesn't feel like it has enough to really break out into something special. Like the threads are there, but not quite fully connecting for me. Pass. #tenqueries 5/

Q3: YA Gothic: There is one element of this story that makes it not YA but it's intrinsic to the plot and I just...I don't know how to work around that. Pass. #tenqueries 4/

Q2: YA Horror: I read this author's books in a very different genre and remember liking them. This kind of horror is very up my alley so this is a no-brainer. Full Request. #tenqueries 3/

Q1: Romance: The way this is pitched it doesn't actually work as a romance, it feels more like upmarket fiction, which I do not rep. Pass. #tenqueries 2/

P9 C T:

It starts as if the MC is talking to the reader then switches to the MC in the present—I would just start her in the present and have her reflect internally without directly the reader

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Q9 C T:

This one could also be streamlined and more straightforward as its coming across more like a summary. Not sure what the stakes are so pick the main conflict and stick with it—the others can come through in the pages

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P8 YA F:

Was not prepare for the pages & it is another one labelled as fantasy but might be contemp/low fantasy.

Remember there are sub genres to fantasy! Very impt to mention which one you are writing in bc it sets up the agent to expect certain things

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Q8 YA F:

So this is a bit long and confusing. I would take some things out to tighten and clarify some of your stakes.

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P7 A F:

Really good! The tension and stakes for both MCs are apparent. Characters are set up well and I feel as if I have a good grasp of the types of characters they will be

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Q7 A F:

Good! But again don’t have to mention all the subplots—leave those to surprise the agent if its not integral to the agents understanding of the beginning.

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P6 YA F:

I’m confused. The query did not prepare me for this to be a contemp fantasy. Also confused about the direction this is going as its not clear. MC (who we don’t know the name of) in and out of conciousness too much

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Q6 YA F:

Really good! I’m ready to go on an adventure with the MCs. Already invested in the choices the MC has to make.

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