Dorian Maffei @DorianMaffei · Mar 28

Q10: Comped one of my favorite books of all time. :) I like the premise & the quiet power it seems to hold

Opening pages have a lot of abstractions & I'm having a hard time getting grounded in the story. The story isn't capturing my heart as much as I had hoped. Pass #10queries

Dorian Maffei @DorianMaffei · Mar 28

Q9: Query says the story is magical realism, however, I'm getting the sense it runs more paranormal. I'm not the right agent at this time for vampires, werewolves, etc. But some agents are starting to look for this kind of stuff again so don't lose hope! Pass. #10queries

Dorian Maffei @DorianMaffei · Mar 28

Q8: Love this premise. Always interested in seeing unique takes on ghost stories. Hooked by pitch & I can tell this author did their homework on me

Upon reading pgs, I'm just not connecting w the writing. Hard to pass but I need complete passion behind the work. Pass #10queries

Dorian Maffei @DorianMaffei · Mar 28

Q7: Author is pitching the third book in a series where the first two are already self-published. Unfortunately, this would be too hard to sell, especially at this point in my career. Pass. #10queries

Dorian Maffei @DorianMaffei · Mar 28

Q6: I'm sure this book will hit the mark for another agent, but I don't feel I can move forward for subjective reasons. I'm usually not the best fit for books with this subject matter. Pass. #10queries

Dorian Maffei @DorianMaffei · Mar 28

Q5: Love getting horror in inbox, however, I'm looking for something very specific. I want to be surprised. The gore/shock factor was really turned on for the first few pgs & I was hoping for something a bit more psychological and suspenseful. Pass. #10queries

Dorian Maffei @DorianMaffei · Mar 28

Q4: Great pitch! Unfortunately, bar is very high on YA F for me since I have so much of it in my inbox, but hoping the pgs knock my socks off.

Strong writing, however, voice felt a bit on the younger side than what I tend to represent. Pass. #10queries

Dorian Maffei @DorianMaffei · Mar 28

Q3: Query is a bit vague & sounds like other things I've read. Not sure I'd be the best agent to help make this stand out on the current market. The characters in the sample pages are reading a bit too much like caricatures and need more development. Pass. #10queries

Dorian Maffei @DorianMaffei · Mar 28

Q2: Premise seems intriguing, however, I'm usually looking 4 more of a layered plot. Hoping the execution in the sample pgs will bedazzle me

Writing is good, however, author spends a lot of time on backstory. I'm looking to be pulled into the story immediately. Pass #10queries

Dorian Maffei @DorianMaffei · Mar 28

Q1: I'm always on the lookout for speculative fiction, however, I have to be extra picky about time travel stories. Not only do I have one on my list currently, but the plot needs to turn common tropes on their head and really blow me away. Pass. #10queries

Ali Herring @HerringAli · 26 Jul 2018

Q10: I'm generalizing, but sometimes concepts like falling stars (star becomes person), genies, etc. are hard to conceptualize. When you try to explain in query, it gets confusing. I've seen several today, so not just this query, but not following how this works. Pass. #10queries

Ali Herring @HerringAli · 26 Jul 2018

Q9: When queries are super long, I get bogged down in details. Still, I read the sample, but didn't connect with the writing. If you can get a high-concept pitch in a query--where you distill the plot & essence of a story into 1 (or 2) simple sentence(s), do it. Pass. #10queries

Ali Herring @HerringAli · 26 Jul 2018

Q8: Wasn't sure about the hook, but then I saw the comps and decided to keep reading. (Comps matter for many reasons). But in the end, I didn't feel engaged in the opening scene. Pass #10queries

Ali Herring @HerringAli · 26 Jul 2018

Q7: Cute voice, but I'm not really looking for kids chapter books at this time. Pass. #10queries

Ali Herring @HerringAli · 26 Jul 2018

Q6: Too similar to something one of my clients has done. Pass #10queries

Ali Herring @HerringAli · 26 Jul 2018

As a follow up to Q5, it's a great idea to follow editors as well as agents on Twitter, to see what they are buying, what they are tweeting about, their #MSWLs, etc. #10queries

Ali Herring @HerringAli · 26 Jul 2018

Q5: Super commercial dark fantasy MG that deals with loss which is nice to see in middle grade since kids this age are learning to tackle those tough subjects. High stakes and the title's to die for. This is literally what I see editors asking for. REQUEST. #10queries

Ali Herring @HerringAli · 26 Jul 2018

Q4: I'm going to pass on this one. The dialog doesn't feel authentic in what is supposed to be a chaotic first scene. You can get a good emotional response from strong dialog, so take advantage of your character's words! #10queries

Ali Herring @HerringAli · 26 Jul 2018

Q3: Pass. Query doesn't lay out much in the way of a plot arc so I'm not sure what's going to happen. Word count is also super high for a debut. I'm kind of sad though because it touched on material I generally love. #10queries

Ali Herring @HerringAli · 26 Jul 2018

Q2: I know several editors who like it when an author plays with structure, but I'm not connecting with the way this one's organized--even though the concept is interesting. I'm looking for an active engaging scene to hook me in the first pages. Pass. #10queries