Q3 - YA Fantasy

Immediately enjoy the MC drive. Details get confusing from there though.

Stakes aren't super clear, and query leads me to wonder if this is dual POV? Still, love inspiration story draws from.

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P2 - ?? Historical 🥗

First paragraph is great. Gives immediate voice and clues the reader in on what we'll be dealing with.

Strong pages but proves this is an age category I'm not accepting for #RevPit. Reveal in query still feels disjointed, so not a fit for me.

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Q2 - ?? Historical

No age category given. Interesting characters, but I don't get their purpose for the story - roles aren't clear.

Stakes are a sudden reveal that feels at odds with the plot described. Focusing more on the main plot may provide clarity.

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P1 - YA Historical 🎂

First pages have a strong voice and set up tension immediately. I'm fed backstory, but in a natural way, so it doesn't come across like an info dump.

Last line super draws me in. Gotta find out what happens next.

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Q1 - YA Historical

Love the setting & conflict. Dual POV draws me in, but query contradicts its own details at one point.

Confused how the two characters intersect in the stakes. But intrigued enough to go on.

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P10 - YA Steampunk 🎂

First page = already know I want the full.

World is fleshed out, and I feel like I'm in the story. Sensory details, voice, and great mix-up of sentence structure gives this a natural flow. Well done.

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Q10 - YA Steampunk

1... 2... 3... three immediate MSWL hits! Fantastic conflict described in the query, and merges perfectly with world building.

100% hooked!

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P9 - YA F 🥗

Pages start farther along in the plot than query made me anticipate. May need to begin earlier so reader can get to know world/MC.

Intrigued by concept but voice/progression wasn't enough to grab me. #RevPit #10queries

Q9 - YA F

Love the character's job/backstory. But query doesn't clarify why the world turns on her or why she'd join with secondary character.

Sudden sci-fi element thrown in there that makes me wonder if I'm a good fit. #RevPit #10queries

P8 - MG UF 🥠

Pages start with a decent chunk of dialogue and a bit of passive voice, but it's got potential. Could easily be tweaked to quicken pacing.

Still really enjoying the concept and the voice. Great scene to open with. #RevPit #10queries

Q8 - MG Urban Fantasy

This sounds so cute! I love the magic blended with MC's hobby/passion.

Confused on certain regard toward secondary character, but there's good conflict and the fantasy elements feel woven in with a fun flair.

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P7 - YA ?? 🥗

Prologue takes up the whole sample, and the opening paragraphs are passive voice. MC is watching the surroundings rather than taking part.

Lots of dialogue slowed the pacing, and I wasn't sure how this scene tied back to details in the query. #RevPit #10queries

Q7 - YA ??

Is this sci-fi? Thriller? No genre listed.

Age is high for YA (might be NA and eventual crossover appeal).

Very long query. It's hard to see how characters are connected to each other in the plot, and the stakes are left unclear.

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P6 - YA F 🎂

Good voice. Great opening scene. Immediately pulled in. All the sensory details here make the world 3D.

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Q6 - YA F

LOVE first details of this. Deff paid attention to my MSWL. But, affects of magic aren't my fave. I like how stakes show these affects end up a burden/choice, so maybe?

Also, light-STEM approach! #RevPit #10queries

P5 - YA F 🥗

The pages lead right into telling language, and the scenes jump back and forth.

We start later than the query led me to believe. Why? Make sure your query and first pages tie in somehow.

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Q5 - YA F

Query logistics leave me confused. I'm not sure what the MC did or did not do, and I'm getting the "chosen one" vibe here. Sometimes works, so withholding judgement.

This seems like Urban Fantasy rather than true Fantasy.

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P4 - MG Contemporary 🥠

Love the first paragraph. Great hook and voice, and I like getting to know the character.

These are solid first pages and definitely hold any interest that was slipping before.

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Q4 - MG Contemporary

I like how the query mixes deeper theming with sport outlet. However, details of MC's life make it feel odd she could accomplish what's described.

End reveal doesn't feel strong enough when tying back to plot. Good journey, though. #RevPit #10queries