Colleen Oefelein

Literary Agent

Adventure Write

Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran

Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips

Query trouble?
Make sure u include all your juicy bits!

1. Use this template to collect them
2. Work them in:
- MC intro
- strong verbs
- inciting incident
- conflict/obstacle {crisis}
- intrigue {secret}
- MC's goal
- stakes {consequences}
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Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips

Struggling with your query?

Writers Digest has a great series called Successful Queries (examples of real life queries that landed an agent or publisher):

writersdigest.com/successful-que…

#WritingCommunity #Writers #amquerying #querytip

Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips

Lately I see submissions that ignore the subjunctive mood.
I wish it were not so.
Here’s a quick and dirty reminder of when/how to use subjunctive:
grammar-monster.com/glossary/subju…
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Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips

Editing tip:

Avoid double-writing. Don't explain what your words show.

Ex:
She couldn't contain her excitement. She sprinted across the street and tackle-hugged him. -> She sprinted across the street and tackle-hugged him.

Much more better 👍

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Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips

Editing tip of the day:

Remove “began to” and “started to” for your MS. Use the verb that follows.

Ex:

The sky started to glisten. —> The sky glistened.

Much stronger 👍

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Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips
Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips

On today's Agent Monday post, meet fab Senior Literary Agent Stephen Fraser @fraserstephena of The Jennifer De Chiara Literary Agency!
@JDLitAgency
#Mondayblogs
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marielamba.wordpress.com/2019/04/15/age…

Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips

Passive voice is hated by me.

It should be annihilated.

Authors should be compelled by a sense of duty to their readers and be forcibly sat at their computer so that the dizziness created by a run-on passive sentence can be addressed.

#querytip

Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips
Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips

Let's talk about explained character motivation & 1st drafts:

🗣️She lunged at the teetering statue to steady it.

This is telling. It distances the POV.
Edit out the telling (the explained motivation, "to steady it") & show action instead:
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Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips

The “Engine Cranking” fix: Ask a couple brand new CPs to read & ID the paragraph that starts your story.

The subtleties that follow engine cranking usually knit all that backstory dumped in those first “engine cranking” paragraphs, beautifully.

#querytip #amwriting #writerslife

Colleen Oefelein
@eerie_o
Literary Agent
Literary Agent, Adventure Write Formerly w/NY's Jennifer De Chiara Christian/fiscal conservative Also Author CM McCoy: EERIE Disabled Veteran
16 MSWL
2 AskAgent
13 Tips

First page trouble?

Axe the engine cranking!

Many authors bury their best opening a few paragraphs/pages into their MS
(thread)
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