Q2 A F: A bit sparse in terms of plot for this to be adult fantasy. Need more info on plot to help clearly define the stakes

And *gasp* no comps!😱
#RevPit #10Queries

P1 A SF: Setting/Worldbuilding not properly established so I was very disoriented💫 Too focused on trying to understand where the story was taking place for me to get a good grasp of what the MC was doing in the moment #RevPit #10Queries

Q1 A SF: Too much info in 1st para--save some to be revealed in MS! If you delete 1st para then lead with 2nd you’ll be fine #RevPit #10Queries

The time for my #RevPit #10Queries session is here! See below for the cheat code!

Q: query
P: first pages

A: adult
YA: young adult
MG: middle grade

F: fantasy
SF: sci-fi
T: thriller
M: mystery
CON: contemporary

Q18: Fantasy: Epic fantasy isn't really my jam, and this comps to the Song of Ice and Fire and that is definitely not my jam. (I never watched GOT, don't @ me I think I'm better off tbh.) Pass. #tenqueries #bonusquery

Q17: Fantasy: This pitch incorrectly uses magical realism to describe itself, which is the first problem I have. It also pulls from stories I don't particularly enjoy, which is another problem. It's just not for me. Pass. #tenqueries #bonusquery

Q16: YA Contemporary: I don't understand what is supposed to be happening in this story. I think that just means this is a no. Pass. #tenqueries #bonusquery

Q15: YA Fantasy: Oh boy, this is the first in a series of 6 planned books, which is A LOT. It also has these weird human trafficking vibes which I don't enjoy. Pass. #tenqueries #bonusquery

Q14: YA Contemporary: There's a lot I liked here, and it's a play on the epistolary format, where the character is dictating journal entries into his phone. But I think it needs more work to truly capture the form. Pass. #tenqueries #bonusquery

Q13: YA Urban Fantasy: I am just very hesitant about time-travel these days. It has elements I like, but other things that I worry about. Pass. #tenqueries #bonusquery

Q12: Science Fiction: This takes place in the 60s and 70s which as we all know by now isn't the best fit for me. Pass. #tenqueries #bonusquery

Q11: YA Sci-Fi: This story just feels too close to others currently on my list and I'm not prepared to take another one on. Pass. #tenqueries #bonusquery

Q10: Romantic Suspense: This story takes place in the near-contemporary end of the Soviet bloc, and is probably better suited to someone who actually reps these types of thrillers. Pass. #tenqueries

Q9: YA Sci-Fi: This portal story isn't for me. Pass. #tenqueries

Q8: Fantasy: This Wizard of Oz retelling is not quite what I'm looking for, partly because it's about a character I'm not really interested in. Pass. #tenqueries

Q7: YA Sci-Fi: I don't think this story is YA, especially since the characters end up as adults. Pass. #tenqueries

Q6: YA Fantasy: This was a tough call, I liked the pitch a lot, but I found the opening pages a bit stilted, and I think it just needs more work. Pass. #tenqueries

Q5: Contemporary Romance: This is basically a holiday romance, where the holiday is Halloween, which is basically my least favorite holiday. (I KNOW, don't @ me.) Pass. #tenqueries

Q4: Historical Romance: This opening scene just put me off the story, something about the way the characters interact isn't working for me. Pass. #tenqueries

Q3: Contemporary Romance: I'm not sure where the romance in this one is supposed to be heading in the query and it promises tears and I'm not really looking for that in my romances these days. Pass. #tenqueries