Q14: A F. Great logline that succinctly teases the story. Original concept but the writing isn't quite there for me yet. It needs a little deeper POV and more emotional depth to connect with the MC in opening pages. Maybe I can help here though... 💛 #RevPit #10Queries

Q13: YA SF. Query ends on a great cliffhanger that puts my own copywriting skills to shame. This author knows how to tantalize! The pages rely a lot on dialogue tags and adverbs, which weakens the dialogue and the prose.💔 #RevPit #10Queries

Q12: MG H. Clear stakes in query that tease the pages are going to be super creepy, just how I like it. Deep POV in the opening pages and goodness, this IS creepy. Is this going to be too dark for MG? Guess we'll find out! 💚 #RevPit #10Queries

Q11: MG F. The query is more synopsis than teaser. The pages start off in media res, which makes doesn't give a clear sense of the "before," lessening the stakes. What normal do we want to return to after the conflict is over? #RevPit #10queries

Q10: MG F. Query is missing some tension so I'm not 100% sure what the stakes are. In the sample pages, the writing feels inconsistent. At times, it feels young and playful and other times very mature and literary. 💔 #RevPit #10queries

Q9: YA SF. Awesome premise with some great comps in the query. Opening scene feels strikingly similar to another opening scene of another well-known book though. I want to experience a fresh story so maybe that's in further pages? 💛 #RevPit #10queries

Q8: MG H. This one comps to two movies. It's good to comp to at least 1 recent book in your query. The word count is a little on the low end for MG, but the pages feel a little over-written. Not sure if we'd be able to get there in our short time together. 💔 #RevPit #10queries

Q7: YA F. Uses some of my favorite books as comps, oooh! The premise is really fascinating, but it's quite similar to a book that I acquired at HarperCollins, so I'm not sure I can be all in again with such a similar (but great!) concept. 💔 #RevPit #10queries

Q6: YA F. This is a retelling of a classic, which is also used for a comp. It would have been more efficient to comp to another retelling rather than the classic itself. The premise feels a little too derivative and not fresh enough. 💔 #RevPit #10queries

Q5: YA F. This query gets a bit more synopsis than query. Remember to tantalize not spoil in the query! I'm having a hard time understanding the world from the opening pages, & my confusion is making it lose the tension of the tense opening scene. 💔 #RevPit #10queries

Q4: A F. In the query this person did a great job with comps "with the elements of X and these other elements of Y." Premise of the pages is promising, and I'm into it, but I wonder if it would be better suited for YA than A. Can we accomplish that together? 💛 #RevPit #10queries

Q3: MG F. This one is very literary, and I'm impressed by the author's credentials, but it's missing comps in the query. The pages are very strong, and they've mastered deep POV in the sample. Not sure they need me! 💔 #RevPit #10queries

Q2: A F. My wordcount cap was 120k words, and this is almost 200k words. I'm a little forgiving with just a little over, but this is a lot over, so remember to always read directions! 💔 #RevPit #10queries

Q1: YA T. Great hook & logline in the query, so right off the bat I'm intrigued. The premise is nice and creepy, which is a great fit for my MSWL. Opening pages could use more deep POV and stakes, which I know I can work with them with. 💚 #RevPit

#10. Picture book. Way outside my wishlist. Pass.

#9. An 86k word adult thriller. Which again I don’t represent but the pitch sounds fantastic so I will forward to my colleague.

#8. Author references some titles the agency represent as comps. That’s awesome. But it’s an adult contemporary at over 200k words. Pass.

#7. A middle grade novel. Not currently acquiring. Most up to date wishlist is on website. Pass.

#6. This one grabs me immediately. A ya mystery with an extremely intriguing premise. Author notes fantastic comps which happen to be some of my fave authors. Word count is a little low but I am definitely going to check this one out!

#5. A YA fantasy. Definitely on my wishlist. Premise is interesting. Word count right on. Introduces me to the protagonist, her greatest desire, what’s in her way of it, and what’s at stake if she fails. Well done and I will definitely read the sample.