Q273: This F just didn’t knit the world and the plot together as well as I’d like. Pass. #500queries

Q272: Screenwriting. Do not rep. Pass. #500queries

Q271: “Dear Agent” Pass. #500queries

#tenqueries 11. Quite a bit of telling in the pages! Not much showing, so no connection with the story or character. :(

#tenqueries 10. A little too proper in language, not utilizing contractions, etc.. Because of this, it doesn’t quite flow like I would hope it would. Another unfortunate pass. :(

#tenqueries 9. Manuscript under 30k words for an adult genre. Far too low to sell! Sorry, but it has to be a pass.

#tenqueries 8. Picture book, which I don’t represent at this time. Sorry! Pass.

#tenqueries 7. The opening of this one has so much world building that it’s slightly overwhelming and seems unnecessary. I’m unfortunately not being drawn into your character’s story because there’s nothing about your character here to connect to. Just what’s around them.

#tenqueries 6. I’m very confused how this manuscript is three different genres that are exact opposites of each other? What confuses me more is that the query is only a sentence long and tells me nothing about the manuscript? Sorry, but this is a pass.

#tenqueries 5. Breaking the 4th wall in order to set up a scene in the beginning just doesn’t work for me. I’d rather you jump me right in to the character’s perspective rather than trying to set a scene by having your character talk directly to me. Sorry!

#tenqueries 4. Short, chopped sentences with a lack of fluency due to telling rather than showing in the opening. Word count is also low due to this, as it usually takes more words to show. :( Pass.

#tenqueries 3. Starting with a lot of backstory and flashbacks, which isn’t engaging me with the character and pulling me into the story. Unfortunate pass.

#tenqueries 2. Great premise, unfortunately the writing/voice was just sounding more adult than YA to me. Unfortunate pass, because that was a super cool concept. :(

#tenqueries 1. Good opening with character and intrigue, but not much world building and a bit too much telling in order to try to fit a large amount of details in there. Be careful of this in opening scenes as it distances your reader with too much info!

Q270: NF. Do not rep. Pass. #500queries

Q269: I wanted to love this horror query, but I just didn’t. Pass #500queries

Q268: Romance query that’s actually a synopsis, and with no sizzle! Pass. #500queries

Q267: Perfectly fine but (to me) meh F query. Pass. #500queries

Q266: Good concept, impeccable comps. Looking forward to reading this romance! Request! #500queries

Q265: Not sure if this YA C will distinguish itself well enough from a huge current blockbuster, but I’m willing to check it out. Request. #500queries