Q188: If Brett Easton Ellis is your comp, I’m not your girl. Pass. #500queries

Q4. PB. The premise is too similar to another title on my list, so the projects would be in direct competition with one another. Passing on this one.

7. This one was actually really cool. I think it starts in the wrong place, but the rest of the chapters were much better. A little bit too dark for me (on the horror side), even though I really liked it! I actually sent this to my co-worker, who is a better fit! 👍 #10subs

Q3. MG. A story about a boy and his dog. Not my kind of story, and also not a very salable premise right now in a market that is hungry for new + fresh voices. Passing on this one.

Q2. Contemporary YA. Great setting, intriguing premise, family secrets, cool character names, a zippy voice that drew me in. Requesting this one!

Q187: YA F. This one hurt. It’s a phenomenal idea, but the worldbuilding just isn’t there. Pass. #500queries

Q1. YA Suspense. A decent premise, but the word count is 25,000 words which is way off for the age group/genre. Also: the first sentence of the writing sample is a rhetorical question. Passing on this one.

6. A little bit too much backstory and telling in the first chapters, distancing me from the main character. I'd love to see more voice! Not much else to say though. I'm just not quite jiving with this one the way I had hoped, even though the writing is decent. Reject 😞 #10subs

5. I really like this one. Completely wasn't expecting this! The tension is high, the writing is pretty solid (though could use a bit of tweaking for less description/backstory), but pulls me in right away and I'm fully connected to the MC! I want MORE! Partial Request 🤗 #10subs

4. Really not connecting with the MC and their actions here. When meeting men in the first few scenes, I want to be able to connect with how she feels. I'm not able to do that because of a lack of emotion/thought and the MC being very opposite of my personality. Reject 😞#10subs

3. Cool concept, but shorter, discordant sentences which are lacking in fluency of both plot and beat. The plot is changing consistently throughout the first few pages, and because I don't have a connection to the reader or foreshadowing, I don't care much. Reject 😞 #10subs

2. Diving into the pages and finding a lot of unintentionally addressing the reader. =( What's actually happening is that the main character's emotions and thoughts are so on display that it appears she/he is talking to me, instead of showing me how they feel. Reject. 😞 #10subs

1. Great concept and was really looking forward to reading this, but the writing feels a bit bland. The sentence structures need a more versatility, the voice sounds a bit older than it should, and I'm wondering if this beginning is necessary to the plot? Rejection. 😞#10subs

Randomly! I pick the ones for #10queries instead of just tweeting in order

Q186: I don’t care about the format/structure of the book unless I like the idea of the book. Pass. #500queries

Q185: It’s like the author of this query was getting paid per SAT word. Pass. #500queries

P10 - YA Steampunk 🎂

First page = already know I want the full.

World is fleshed out, and I feel like I'm in the story. Sensory details, voice, and great mix-up of sentence structure gives this a natural flow. Well done.

#RevPit #10queries

Q10 - YA Steampunk

1... 2... 3... three immediate MSWL hits! Fantastic conflict described in the query, and merges perfectly with world building.

100% hooked!

#RevPit #10queries

P9 - YA F 🥗

Pages start farther along in the plot than query made me anticipate. May need to begin earlier so reader can get to know world/MC.

Intrigued by concept but voice/progression wasn't enough to grab me. #RevPit #10queries

Q9 - YA F

Love the character's job/backstory. But query doesn't clarify why the world turns on her or why she'd join with secondary character.

Sudden sci-fi element thrown in there that makes me wonder if I'm a good fit. #RevPit #10queries