Alec Shane
@alecdshane
Literary Agent
Literary Agent at Writers House, LLC. Wannabe Patriots sportswriter. ashane@writershouse.com
100 MSWL
1 AskAgent
346 Queries
122 Tips

Q5: Detective noir. Nothing overly bad about it, but doesn't blow me away. Detective noir has to blow me away. #tenqueries

Alec Shane
@alecdshane
Literary Agent
Literary Agent at Writers House, LLC. Wannabe Patriots sportswriter. ashane@writershouse.com
100 MSWL
1 AskAgent
346 Queries
122 Tips

Q4: WWII story, opens with Jewish boy roused from his bed to flee the oncoming Nazis. Also an overplayed opening for historical. #tenqueries

Alec Shane
@alecdshane
Literary Agent
Literary Agent at Writers House, LLC. Wannabe Patriots sportswriter. ashane@writershouse.com
100 MSWL
1 AskAgent
346 Queries
122 Tips

Q3: Running through the woods is the opener. Been done to death. Pass. #tenqueries

Alec Shane
@alecdshane
Literary Agent
Literary Agent at Writers House, LLC. Wannabe Patriots sportswriter. ashane@writershouse.com
100 MSWL
1 AskAgent
346 Queries
122 Tips

Q2: Author suggests MS will appeal to boys, but this is clearly geared towards girls. Sometimes authors try to "force" a genre #tenqueries

Alec Shane
@alecdshane
Literary Agent
Literary Agent at Writers House, LLC. Wannabe Patriots sportswriter. ashane@writershouse.com
100 MSWL
1 AskAgent
346 Queries
122 Tips

Q1: Eek. This is just bad writing. Pass. #tenqueries

Caitlin McDonald
@literallycait
Literary Agent
literary agent @MaassLitAgency for SFF, YA, & GN • she/her • queer • ADHD • intensely editorial 📚 #BLM #TransRightsAreHumanRights
69 MSWL
33 AskAgent
124 Queries
39 Tips

Q10: YA. Premise has potential but the writing isn't strong enough to keep me reading. Pass. #tenqueries

Caitlin McDonald
@literallycait
Literary Agent
literary agent @MaassLitAgency for SFF, YA, & GN • she/her • queer • ADHD • intensely editorial 📚 #BLM #TransRightsAreHumanRights
69 MSWL
33 AskAgent
124 Queries
39 Tips

Q9: Incomplete ms--you shouldn't be querying at this stage. Queries should have complete and polished manuscripts ready. Pass. #tenqueries

Caitlin McDonald
@literallycait
Literary Agent
literary agent @MaassLitAgency for SFF, YA, & GN • she/her • queer • ADHD • intensely editorial 📚 #BLM #TransRightsAreHumanRights
69 MSWL
33 AskAgent
124 Queries
39 Tips

Q8: YA fantasy. Writing and premise didn't grip me. European folklore needs a really unique hook since it's so overdone. Pass. #tenqueries

Caitlin McDonald
@literallycait
Literary Agent
literary agent @MaassLitAgency for SFF, YA, & GN • she/her • queer • ADHD • intensely editorial 📚 #BLM #TransRightsAreHumanRights
69 MSWL
33 AskAgent
124 Queries
39 Tips

Q7: YA SF. Somewhat generic premise, but it's the extremely generic opening scene that killed it for me. Pass. #tenqueries

Caitlin McDonald
@literallycait
Literary Agent
literary agent @MaassLitAgency for SFF, YA, & GN • she/her • queer • ADHD • intensely editorial 📚 #BLM #TransRightsAreHumanRights
69 MSWL
33 AskAgent
124 Queries
39 Tips

Q6: Tech thriller. I'm not a fan of the classic thriller voice this has, so this probably isn't a good fit for me. Pass. #tenqueries

Caitlin McDonald
@literallycait
Literary Agent
literary agent @MaassLitAgency for SFF, YA, & GN • she/her • queer • ADHD • intensely editorial 📚 #BLM #TransRightsAreHumanRights
69 MSWL
33 AskAgent
124 Queries
39 Tips

Q5: Fantasy. Good writing, but started in medias res without tension. Also didn't follow query guidelines. Pass. #tenqueries

Caitlin McDonald
@literallycait
Literary Agent
literary agent @MaassLitAgency for SFF, YA, & GN • she/her • queer • ADHD • intensely editorial 📚 #BLM #TransRightsAreHumanRights
69 MSWL
33 AskAgent
124 Queries
39 Tips

Q4: Historical. Difficult to follow, presumes too much reader knowledge of the era right off the bat. Pass. #tenqueries

Caitlin McDonald
@literallycait
Literary Agent
literary agent @MaassLitAgency for SFF, YA, & GN • she/her • queer • ADHD • intensely editorial 📚 #BLM #TransRightsAreHumanRights
69 MSWL
33 AskAgent
124 Queries
39 Tips

Q3: Fantasy. The pantheon mash-up could be neat but isn't well justified in the query. The writing isn't quite up to par. Pass. #tenqueries

Caitlin McDonald
@literallycait
Literary Agent
literary agent @MaassLitAgency for SFF, YA, & GN • she/her • queer • ADHD • intensely editorial 📚 #BLM #TransRightsAreHumanRights
69 MSWL
33 AskAgent
124 Queries
39 Tips

Q2: YA fantasy, similar premise to the previous query, and again, the voice just doesn't grab me. Pass. #tenqueries

Caitlin McDonald
@literallycait
Literary Agent
literary agent @MaassLitAgency for SFF, YA, & GN • she/her • queer • ADHD • intensely editorial 📚 #BLM #TransRightsAreHumanRights
69 MSWL
33 AskAgent
124 Queries
39 Tips

Q1: YA fantasy. Interesting but somewhat convoluted premise. The writing's not bad but doesn't grab me. Pass. #tenqueries

Jordy Albert
@bluedragonfly81
Literary Agent
Literary Agent @BookerAlbertLit | Lover of dogs, books, and tea. Total fangirl. #mugiwarapirates #worldpeace
20 MSWL
1 AskAgent
341 Queries
24 Tips

Q10: Premise seems a bit too similar to other titles out there. And the word count is really long. Pass. #tenqueries

Jordy Albert
@bluedragonfly81
Literary Agent
Literary Agent @BookerAlbertLit | Lover of dogs, books, and tea. Total fangirl. #mugiwarapirates #worldpeace
20 MSWL
1 AskAgent
341 Queries
24 Tips

Q9: Not sure what this book is about, and the query is in second person/pages in 3rd. It's better to be consistent. Pass. #tenqueries

Jordy Albert
@bluedragonfly81
Literary Agent
Literary Agent @BookerAlbertLit | Lover of dogs, books, and tea. Total fangirl. #mugiwarapirates #worldpeace
20 MSWL
1 AskAgent
341 Queries
24 Tips

Q8: Thriller (YA?). The premise isn't really my cup of tea. Pass. #tenqueries

Jordy Albert
@bluedragonfly81
Literary Agent
Literary Agent @BookerAlbertLit | Lover of dogs, books, and tea. Total fangirl. #mugiwarapirates #worldpeace
20 MSWL
1 AskAgent
341 Queries
24 Tips

Q7: Fantasy(?). Query is a bit vague, and I wasn't invested in the pages. Pass. #tenqueries

Jordy Albert
@bluedragonfly81
Literary Agent
Literary Agent @BookerAlbertLit | Lover of dogs, books, and tea. Total fangirl. #mugiwarapirates #worldpeace
20 MSWL
1 AskAgent
341 Queries
24 Tips

Q6: Query doesn't really say anything about the story. I didn't really love the pages. Pass. #tenqueries