#QueryTip #TenQueries Q4 Full synopsis and first three chapter attached per guidelines (perfect). Notes title, genre (perfect) but not market. Like to know if its adult or YA. Also includes word count (perfect) but it's over 200k. Way too long for the genre. Must pass. @belcastr
Q10: Starts by calling me the wrong name (which happens more often than you’d think) then the query is just them asking me if I’m open to submissions and doesn’t tell me about the book - opening is abrupt with no chance to connect to the MC who is trust into action - Pass
Q8: It must be Fantasy day because here is another except the query which is addressed to me is just an excerpt from the book and doesn’t tell me what the book is about - word count is way out of range - opens with character waking up - pass
Q9: "I don't read stories similar to what I write. I think [x] audience would enjoy this, but I don't know -- I haven't actually read any of those books they like." Pass. #tenqueries
You need to be familiar with the market/genre/audience you're writing in/for. It's not optional.
Q8: Opens with questions, continued throughout. "Did you ever wonder..." "What would you do if..." Pass. #tenqueries
My teachers always said to never start an essay with "[Word] is defined as..." And now I'm telling you to never start/continue a query with pointless questions.
Q6: F. "My manuscript is a 468,000-word..." Pass. #tenqueries
Honey, NOBODY is going to read that. That's nearly 2,000 pages. Cut 3/4 of it and you'll stand a better chance. Even The Greats in genre fiction don't have 2,000 pages.
Q5: Thriller (don't rep). Told me what the ms is (themes, plot structure, philosophy) and isn't (genre), but didn't share *the story*. Pass. #tenqueries
A query is like a book jacket. Set the stage with your MC, leave a hook, and let the reader discover what the MS is or isn't.
Q4: YA HF. Neat concept, certainly a different look at this period of history. However, sample writing provided = unappealing to a modern YA audience because it (1) reads like a textbook (dates, facts, figures) and (2) did not open with a scene/follow an MC. Pass. #tenqueries
Q2: YA F. 5 paragraphs about why I should rep the writer, 1 paragraph about the world of the story. Pass. #tenqueries
SFF pitches are hard! But you need your reader to be interested in your *MC* first and foremost, and why we need/want to follow THEM on this fantastical journey.