Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Feb 2

#5 = contemporary romance. Great premise but, alas, the writing is weak and there's not enough detail about the protagonists for me to feel the chemistry. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Feb 2

#4 = science fiction. Query includes author bio, title, links to previously published (self published) books and no pitch. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Feb 2

#3 = middle grade fantasy. An interesting heroine but the premise and conflict feel generic and derivative. My gut reaction is "we've seen this kind of thing before" and writing isn't strong enough to convince me otherwise. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Feb 2

#2 = paranormal romance. Writing (basic grammar and sentence structure) is weak. Query says "lots of cool adventures" but isn't specific about conflict or romance. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Feb 2

#1 = science fiction. Query is unspecific about the plot and is confusing in terms of characters. Lots of details and lists (what exists in the world, who the people are, etc) but it doesn't tell a story. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 26

#5 = adult science fiction. Some cool space elements here and unique-sounding aliens/monsters. But, no introduction of protagonist(s). Readers want big characters to follow on these exciting adventures. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 26

#4 = contemporary middle grade. Protagonist is the "chubby" girl, made fun of by the "popular" girl. Not fond of this trope as it slides into fat shaming too easily. It's not a deal breaker but I'd want to see superior writing. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 26

#3 = young adult science fiction. Interesting premise but writing is sloppy and unclear. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 26

#2 = paranormal romance. Nice description of heroine but very little on the hero or the conflict (what keeps them apart?). PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 26

#1 = adult epic fantasy. Heroine and conflict are generic (she discovers she's the chosen one and heads out to save the day). "Chosen One" isn't necessarily a deal breaker but this one didn't grab me. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 19

#5 = currently self published contemporary young adult. One of my requirements is that a submission be for a book that's never been previously published, so PASS. #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 19

#4 = contemporary young adult. the story feels overly familiar in terms of characters, world and conflict. Not a big enough hook. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 19

#3 = fantasy. Some good character details and character motivation but overall writing is not strong enough and not big enough conflict. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 19

#2 = science fiction. Really cool premise but the writing is weak. Alas. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 19

#1 = contemporary middle grade. Voice sounds too young and conflict feels too familiar. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 12

#4 = young adult fantasy. Pitch paragraph is all backstory with limited introduction to the protagonist. PASS. #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 12

#3 = adult epic fantasy. Lots of description of the world, backstory and magic but no solid introduction of characters or plot. PASS. #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 12

#2 = contemporary romance. I don't get a sense of sexual tension or chemistry and the external conflict is weak. PASS. #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 12

#1 = young adult science fiction. Cool spaceship setting but the conflict feels melodramatic and generic. PASS. #5QueriesIn5Tweets

Sara Megibow @SaraMegibow · Jan 5

#5 = young adult fantasy. Set at a school for magicians (this trope is overdone although it's not, necessarily a deal breaker) and the pitch paragraph is weakly written. PASS #5QueriesIn5Tweets