Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · May 10

Q10: YA PNR. Query makes little sense; plot has no causal correlation, just events happening. Pages don’t overcome this. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · May 10

Q9: YA fantasy. Sounds more MG. Plot unclear. Query more bio and “inspiration” than actual query. Pages don’t work. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · May 10

Q8: Sci-fi. Muddled plot, dudebro vibe, pages are flat and unclear. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · May 10

Q7: Sci-fi. Now *this* has stakes, personal and tied to neat world-building. Great query. Pages read like a diff book. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · May 10

Q6: Fantasy. Intriguing world, but query is just set up, and pages don’t hold me. Nothing at stake. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · May 10

Q5: MG fantasy. Query is synopsis, with no stakes. Pages start too soon; bogged down in unnecessary events. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · May 10

Q4: YA fantasy. Except not; querier doesn’t know what YA means. Query is a synopsis. Writing isn’t up to it. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · May 10

Q3: YA dystopian. Plot seems all over the place. Set up is just too standard for the genre. Snark feels forced. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · May 10

Q2: Sci-fi. Premise has promise. Pages are techno-babble heavy and female MC seems a standard trope with no complexity. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · May 10

Q1: YA sci-fi. Long query. Typical premise, but with an interesting twist. Characters read flat in pages; voice, too. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · Apr 1 2016

Q10: Historical fantasy. Hello casual racism. No definite plot mentioned. Pages are explanatory world-building. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · Apr 1 2016

Q9: Historical. Premise is intriguing, though plot a bit muddled. Writing is flat and expository even in active scenes. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · Apr 1 2016

Q8: YA dystopia. Hard genre but great all-too-real premise. Reads younger audience. Pages aren’t up to it; infodump. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · Apr 1 2016

Q7: MG fantasy. Query is a little out there, even for my weird tastes. I mistook the pages for a synopsis; not drawn in. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · Apr 1 2016

Q6: Querier doesn’t understand what genre means. Or the business. Done-to-death plot. Unengaging writing. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · Apr 1 2016

Q5: Fantasy. The plot is a bit typical. The pages are old-fashioned, on purpose, but too on the nose and kinda sexist. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · Apr 1 2016

Q4: YA UF. Decent premise; marginalized rep is hrm. Prologue is great but pages go on in diff tone, boring events. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · Apr 1 2016

Q3: YA fantasy. Query a little muddled but solid idea. Pages read older and are unfocused. Not drawn in. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · Apr 1 2016

Q2: Fantasy. Query doesn’t focus on an MC, so reads scattered. Writing isn’t up to it and world-building is shallow. Pass. #querylunch

Amy Boggs @notjustanyboggs · Apr 1 2016

Q1: Sci-fi. Query is 2 paragraphs but each read as a separate pitch. Writing repetitive and trying at being clever. Pass. #querylunch