#RevPit #10queries P9: Odd contrast in 1st page. Family details apparent that I didn't see coming from query. Unsure but MC seems unlikable

#RevPit #10queries Q9: New Adult Romance. Every male character painted as sexually/socially dominant jerk. Can't tell how benefits plot

#RevPit #10queries Q8: Adult Women's Fic. 2 plots seem at odds (weird mix for this book). Wonder if pgs will be unclear of find a blend

#RevPit #10queries P7: Good voice, but unsure MCs need to be painted so sexual right off the bat. Again, shame about word count =[

#RevPit #10queries Q7: Adult Romance. LOVE the power complex here. But word count is WAY too low. This is novella length =[

#RevPit #10queries P6: Beginning needs clearer details. Where are we & why? Leaves too much to guess. Voice doesn't quite click w/ me

#RevPit #10queries Q6: Adult Contemp. Confused on real plot of story. Seems multiple fighting for top spot. Beginning needs more grounding

#RevPit #10queries P5: Another fixable 1st line. Natural writing, good voice. Love taste of both POVs. NEED TO SEE MORE!

#RevPit #10queries Q5: Adult Romance. Great hook & stakes. Great job finding conflict in romance. Love plan for series details. <3

#RevPit #10queries P4: Awkward 1st line. Starts w/ POV not promised in query. Suggest new beginning w/ MC to understand situation better

Q10: No characters are presented in the opening 2 paragraphs. There’s just a description of a place from a distant POV. Pass #10queries

Q9: Every sentence has a SAT word or two. Using big words doesn’t make your writing better, it makes it less relatable. Pass. #10queries

Q8: Opens w/ dialogue w/o establishing characters. Don’t care about what they're saying if I don't know who's saying it. Pass. #10queries

Q7: Historical fiction that’s so focused on explaining a moment in history that no time is spent establishing characters. Pass. #10queries

Q6: YA novel that infantilizes its protag. Shows the character from an outside perspective rather than the character’s POV. Pass. #10queries

Q5: Use of 2nd person POV in the opening chapter puts me right in the scene and the imagery is terrifying. Request full. #10queries

Q4: The female protagonist seems ditzy and needs her boyfriend to explain things to her in a way that feels sexist. Pass. #10queries

Q3: Book has an excellent premise, but it uses a distant 3rd person POV that doesn’t let me connect to the characters. Pass. #10queries

Q2: Lists mostly self-pubbed/small press books as comp titles, which tells me big pubs aren’t interested in this topic. Pass. #10queries

Q1: Almost every noun has a couple adjectives attached to it, which slows down the flow of sentences. Pass. #10queries